Who was this handsome man
She saw him in his radiance
What was this strange feeling
He stole her resistance
*****
She was drawn to him
His body was temptation
She had to have him
Without life didn’t bare living
*****
He could not see her
Or return her feelings
He was not capable
No love only rejection
*****
It broke her heart
To be invisible
The sound of pain
Tortured and unbearable
*****
Left a haunting echo
Of a space never to fill
Where the unrequited love
Causes emptiness still
*****
Day 21’s challenge
For Day 21 the prompt is “Brim provides us with several suggestions for generative writing exercises, and we’d like to challenge to today to tackle her third one, which is based in the myth of Narcissus. After reading the myth, try writing a poem that plays with the myth in some way. For example, you could imagine that imagine the water is speaking to you, the narcissus flower. Or you could write a poem in which the narcissus berates the Kardashians for stealing their neurosis. Or a poem that comments on the narcissism of our time, i.e. beauty and body obsession, etc..”
I’ve had a productive day today but away from the PC, leaving little time to put something together for todays prompt.
I think Echo’s story is one many have experienced. I’d bet everyone has wanted someone who doesn’t know they exist and dismisses them without realising the hurt caused. If you’ve not experienced that – lucky you.
The poem reminded me of one I wrote a few years ago titled ”My Universe”. Here it is:
My universe
He’s like reaching for the moon
Out of my league, out of my grasp
He’s become my whole universe
All consuming, lost in a love so vast
I’m floating, swimming, pink sky space
Glittering stars as bright as his eyes
Lost my way with no turning back
I lost control, I’m falling into black
I knew not to venture into the unknown
Stick to safe and what you know
Keep your feet firmly planted in the soil
Or be prepared for all consuming black holes
I don’t like feeling I have no control
Having someone I’d give my all
But now I can’t live without him
I’m lost in space and it’s all consuming
